Thursday, February 21, 2008

The mad knight-Tanner L

The Mad Knight
Once upon a time there was a Mad Knight named Zack. Zack was mad because his little brother, thirteen year old Mat, was showing off his new gold sword and shining Silver armour in front of a crowd who had gathered at the castle.
Zack was sixteen and he had’t gotten
a new sword new or armour sence Mat was born. The crowed payed no attention to Zack. So Zack decide to go for a walk to town where he couldn’t see mat and his new shining armour. When he arrived he saw something he had never seen before. It was a giant cave almost half the size of his royal castle ! Wow he thought as he raced over .Zack started in to the cave. it was pitch black except for giant yellow eyes staring at him but he didn’t run like his brother would have. he stayed there bravely.
A green scaly dragon came toward him. "Come with me and let me pretend to slay you in front of my little brother." The dragon shook his head as if to say yes he opened his mouth and out came a flame. Zack ducked and it flew over him. Wow ! the flame burned down the building behind him. "Don’t ever do that again." said Zack. The dragon lowered his head and followed Zack back to the castle to where everyone, including his family, was standing. His brother stared in fear. he told the dragon a different plan. It was to battle mat instead and pretend to hurt him . So Zack and the dragon pondced out in front of mat and lifted his giant green scaly foot.The dragon had mat down while Mat was trying to snach his sword from it's holder. Zack announced let him go if ,"he will let me have some attention" also oook Mat cried I will get you some armour just please make the dragon let me go. Let him go Zack told the dragon the dragon let him free.
''I will buy new armour with the money mom and dad gave me today''. Zack grawled he thought to him self don't get jelus not this time. As for the dragon he got a new home in a hill now shaped as a cave he's now a nice pet.

1 comment:

Anonymous said...

Your story is good, but it seems you cut it off near the end. The climax was too quick, you should have included an epic battle scene. If you finish the story it could be very good